Presentation Feedback

Dear Group members,
Please review my presentation and use the critique sheet Dr. Archibald has provided to give me feedback so I can improve the presentation.
Thank you!!

Alli

Conference notes

<---- This basicly sums up how I felt going into the session. I was very unsure of what I was supposed to be doing and if I had the right idea on anything I was doing. I didn't really. I was already panicing because my printer wasn't working! (What else is new!!! It hates me. I swear it does...) I felt stupid cause I couldn't figure out how to print from the SMC and so I was upset because I wasn't sure if the paper was part of our grade or not. So I was really worried about that. So when it was my turn to go in my stumach was in knots and I felt sick. He asked me what I had in mind and I told him that I wanted to do something with how the whole woman's rights issue started like what caused it, who caused and how did it come about....was it just one woman who was like "Enough is enough...we are people too we deserve the same rights as they do!"? I really wasn't sure and I was kind of curious to find out. He said that wasn't what I was supposed to be doing! That it was supposed to be able to be argued. He told me about something about the third wave movement and how the third wave and the second wave didn't really agree on what to fight for. I am to talk about that in my paper, what they had in common and what they didn't. What they should be fighting for today and if they have the right idea, and if not what SHOULD they be fighting for.  I wasn't sure if this was supposed to be a research paper argument combonation paper but I think that's what it has turned into. I read some other blogs and I feel some other people are with me when I say we feel a little unsure on that. But hopefully that will be cleared up with time. I'm really excited about this paper and I can't wait to get started! It's something I look forward to learning more about seeing as I am a woman and some of these issues will affect me since I plan on going into the work force. I hope to learn alot and maybe learn how I can help in some way.
Thank you for reading!

This has been Allison Kreiser.

Good bye for now!

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problem after problem after problem!

I appoligize! First the internet, then my flashdrive, then when I finally get home and I get on the house computer my dad was like "We had a virus..had to wipe the whole system. What ever you saved isn't on there anymore." I was quite upset. I had to start my paper ALL over again and it's STILL not done. I want to cry. Stressed out is a very good word for how I feel today.

Anyway here is the first paragraph. What is it about?

If Lucretia Mott and Gloria had not been told they couldn’t, would they still have done what they did? Would we, women, have the rights we have now? Probably not. It’s because these woman are different in their ways but very similar that we have our rights. They aren’t as ‘perfect’ as we would like them to be but we can’t be picky. We still don’t get equal pay to a man. But we have all else. We are treated different sometimes but that’s kind of understandable. Women are very different from men. These ladies had something to fight for and felt strong about and they ran with it.

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Insites from reading new document

Hello again!

I was told by my professor to write about the difference between the old article and the new one we just read.  That’s kind of hard but also kind of easy –if I state the obvious things. Like when each one was written.  Also the format is very different. The one is an interview and the other is more of a sermon that was given by Lucrita Mott and very religious while the other one is very bold and has use of ‘colorful’ words.

I learned from the new paper that the situation has changed in some ways.  Women are now allowed to vote and aren’t treated like property by their husbands when they get married.  They also have more rights in the work place.

Woman can now wear what they please, talk how they wish and tell jokes. It’s a lot different from how it used to be.

Gloria seems to think that there is no movement anymore it’s really just people fighting for what they believe is right and how it should be done. I agree with this to degree. I believe there is still a group. They work to make things better for woman and make it equal like it’s supposed to be like the bible says. Lucretia Mott lived by that saying. It had a very high importance to her.

Also if there was no such change woman would still not be able to vote, attend meetings, dress how they want, speak how they want and they would still be a slave to their husband. Today the woman can work, she can speak for herself she can do what she pleases! The main thing is she gets treated slightly different and she gets paid less still then a man does. But it has improved greatly over time.

Revising 1report assignment

Hello! This is my post for my class. My proffessor asked us to post how we are going to edit our paper. I need to completely rewrite mine. I miss understood the assignment- typical me. However, I know what I want to do now with my paper and what the assignment is…I have a better understanding what I want to talk about. As you know, my paper is on Woman’s Issues. I thought it was on just Lucrita Mott and what she did to help it…I need to talk about what she did and what is happening today. Did what she tried to do actually happen?  Has things changed since she was alive? Would she feel there is a sense of equality between men and woman, yet?

I personally don’t think there is. I don’t think she would either. We still don’t get paid the same, we still get treated differently and can’t play some of the same sports as men, even if we wanted to.  I think I need to add more of my own opinions in the paper instead of just facts! I noticed that in some of the other sample papers I read. They had opinions in them. Mine was pure facts…how boring!

I also feel I need to come up with a thesis statement, I had one but it wasn’t really a thesis statement, it was just a statement that I kept talking about throughout the paper…I’m not sure what that is called but it wasn’t a thesis statement according to the lady who I had peer edit my paper at the college editing center.  She tore my paper apart. But I’m glad she did.

I also need to fix the title. I dislike it. I think it’s boring. I am thinking of changing it to “Woman’s rights?  What’s that? Does it exist?”  I feel like that fits better. I feel like people will be attracted to it more. What do you think of it? Give me an opinion! I’d love to hear feedback on it. Titles are always my weakness…I don’t know what to title them…I’m always tempted to title things “Insert witty and funny title here…” But I know that’s not “acceptable”! But it is funny!

So that is what I am going to do to change my paper. I hope it works better this time.

 I thought I would add my emotion at this moment. This child shows it perfectly and he looks like he's writing a paper!! FRUSTRATION!  I couldn't help but laugh. =D Smile- the day will only get better.

Blog response 1

I am doing the response to number 2:1  Peter Elbow's Believing game. Child abuse is the beating of children when the parents are upset with them or feel they need to let out anger on their child. It is a can be from hitting, to burning to really anything that can harm the child. It can be neglect or just physical sometimes even sexual.

Child abuse is a good thing because it teaches the child write from wrong. If you don't hit the child it won't learn. It will continue to do the same thing over and over again unless you smack it around a little. It will stick in the child's head. "If I do this, I'll get hurt." It works just fine and I don't see anything wrong with it. If the child did something wrong it needs to be punished.

Child abuse is not okay. The child didn't know what was right or what was wrong. You should tell the child calmly that what he or she did was wrong and make a game plan of how to get the child to understand that the child was wrong or what the did was right. A reward or something should be given or a praise if needed. There is no need to harm the child.

I am going to ask my roommate to read and tell me which side she thinks I am on. If I did this correctly she shouldn't be able to tell...but I think we all know... After I get her answer I will reveal the true answer!! Ah well I failed. She picked the second and that is true. I highly disagree with child abuse. My best friend is and I can't stand it. It's a touchy subject with me.

Womans Issues

The picture above is of a woman named Lucretia Mott. What was so special about this woman? Well, she was an Antislavery and Woman's Right leader!

She was born on January 3, 1793 in Nantucket, Massachusetts.  She married James Mott in 1811.

She was from a family of Quackers and she became a Quaker Minister in 1821! She was active in abolitionist movements before the civil war. She helped found two anti-slavery groups. Lucretia was also well known for her speeches she gave against slavery!

When Lucretia tried to attend the World Anti-Slavery Convention in London, England, the man who controlled the convention refused to hear her and her woman friends. Her response was pleding to work for woman’s rights.  In 1848 she and another lady by the name of Elizabeth Cady, organized the first woman’s rights convention in the United States! This convention took place in Seneca Falls, New York. From this meeting came more demands for rights for woman, including better education, employment opportunities and the right to vote. After 1848, Lucretia spoke widely for both woman’s rights and the abolition of slavery.

She even wrote a book! Her book was called “Discourse on Woman” it was published in 1850. It discussed the educational, economic and political restrictions woman in Western Europe and America.

After slavery was abolished in 1865 she supported the rights of black Americans to vote.

Lucretia Mott died  at the age of 87! She did so much in her life time. For being a woman and not having many rights herself she still fought for the rights of others! She was a wonderful woman and not one to stand in the side lines and let things take their own course. She took action where she thought she needed too. She should be remembered for that.

My research is coming along slowly but surely.  I found this to be a bit interesting as well. I found it on this page

http://www.lucidcafe.com/library/96jan/mott.html  if you wish to check it out yourself.

Chew, Robin
1995-2011
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Image was found on google images.

The Last Ride of Cowboy Bob

Hello and Welcome!
I guess I should start off with saying my name is Allison. But I’m not the point of this blog. I am merely the writer. I am doing this blog for my class for a grade. I do however hope that it may somehow? I’m not sure how, help you, or you find it interesting. I do! Without further ado, I would like to introduce you to what I started to research on my topic of Woman’s issues.

Cowboy Bob was man who robbed bank after bank. He wore a western hat and never spoke a word. When he was finally arrested they discovered their Cowboy Bob was actually a woman. So would she then be Cowgirl Bobette?

Her name was Peggy Jo Tallas. Peggy Jo was 49 years old. She was living with her ailing mother and would take care of her. But after she fed her mother breakfast she’d go to the bedroom and change into a pair of men’s pants and a dark men’s shirt. She put on a men’s leather jacket and she had a fake beard pinned onto a mannequin head in her closet.  On the mannequins head was a white cowboy hat she put on as well.

Her costume was almost done. She had a few finishing touches. Off to the bathroom! She put on a pair of boots way to big for her feet. She put a towel under her shirt to make herself look heavier. She roved some adhesive across her face to attach the fake beard. She colored her hair grey with some paint she got at a costume shot. She then put on the cowboy hat, a large pair of silver sunglasses and a pair of gloves. She wrote a note and put it in her pocket and off she went.

She would then go to the bank pull out the note that read “This is a bank Robbery, Give me your money. No marked bills or dye packs.”

She would speed off and back home to fix her mother lunch. She didn’t rob just one bank but many.

I found that after doing research my interest was spiked more. I don’t want to ramble more then I really need to. So I think I’m going to end this here!

Have a great rest of the day! I hope you enjoyed this!  

The website I got the info from is :  http://goliath.ecnext.com/coms2/gi_0199-4954719/The-last-ride-of-cowboy.html

This is what she looked like. Just thought I'd share.